I really like its form, it's aesthetically pleasing to just look att the disposition of the text, but I'm a bit confused about the last line. Since "thee" is the archaic singular form of "you" it appears as though the coffee is all over me, but maybe that was your intention?
I do like the rythm of the limerick, I might have wanted to use another word than balcony, but it is a matter of personal pronunciation and I realize that you need to be flexible and use your imagination when creating these kinds of rhymes.
I am however confused by the last word, am I supposed to have the coffe splashed on me?
I liked it, but have you kept to the rhythms andy gave us or have you bent the rules? Not trying to be condescending or anything, but I can't get a good rhythm on it myself :S
I really like its form, it's aesthetically pleasing to just look att the disposition of the text, but I'm a bit confused about the last line. Since "thee" is the archaic singular form of "you" it appears as though the coffee is all over me, but maybe that was your intention?
SvaraRaderaI do like the rythm of the limerick, I might have wanted to use another word than balcony, but it is a matter of personal pronunciation and I realize that you need to be flexible and use your imagination when creating these kinds of rhymes.
SvaraRaderaI am however confused by the last word, am I supposed to have the coffe splashed on me?
// Sophie
I liked it, but have you kept to the rhythms andy gave us or have you bent the rules?
SvaraRaderaNot trying to be condescending or anything, but I can't get a good rhythm on it myself :S